The purpose of any story or ‘material’ should NOT be to entertain. It should be to ATTRACT. You
attract by showing your humanity (your feelings and reactions to life). You had many opportunities to do that with in this story but missed them:
How did you feel about the dog?
You could have said, “my neighbor’s dog was in front of his house. I love this dog. He is so affectionate and fun. I actually taught him a couple of tricks..” or however you felt. How did you feel about the dog hitting his head?
Here, you did express some reaction – which is good. But think about what you are saying. I can see that you are not focused on how you are feeling with the story but simply looking to be entertaining. You are taking the dog’s potential injuries very lightly and are more concerned about having to tell the owners about the dog then anything else.
You should have hammed it up here: “I was like, oh my gosh, you poor thing. I rushed over there
thinking maybe I would have to give mouth to snout resuscitation, which I really didn’t want to do but I would have to save the little guy. So I got over there and leaned over and checked for breathing.” Then I would pause here and let her ask, “What? Was he okay?” Then tell her, “He
suddenly sprung to his feet, almost giving me a heart attack. So you see I am lucky to even be able to make this phone call.”
Also, over all slow down and try to shorten your stories. Cut out the facts and put in more of how you feel. When you can do that, you will be able to spin stories about the most simplest things into attraction.